THOUGTFUL WRITING

The importance of responding "thoughtfully".

    • I'm asking you to put not only effort but thought and insight into your response.

    • A very good way to do that is to state your claim first. Then back up your claim with some sort of evidence.
    • If you are writing scientifically that evidence should show facts, evidence and/or data. It's an excellent way to show what you know or have learned (or both).

      If you are giving your opinion or feeling, state your opinion or feeling and then back that up with evidence to support how or why you are feeling that way.

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Examples of science writing:

Prompt: Imagine you had the opportunity to live in the core of the sun, what challenges would you face there?

 Weak Response:

"It would be really hot in the core of the sun." Notice lack of IQIA response so the response seems rather detached. (Grade: C-/D)

 Good Enough Response:

"If I had the opportunity to live in the core of the sun, it would be really, really challenging because it was so hot." Notice use of IQIA so the response is set up very nicely, but there isn't much thought put into the response. Obviously it is hot in the core of the sun... so what? (Grade C)

Thoughtful Response:

"If I had the opportunity to live in the core of the sun, I would face a number of substantial challenges. First and foremost of these would be to find some way to keep from getting instantly vaporized by the intense temperatures of millions of degrees present there." A very thoughtful response-- note the reference to the temperatures found there but also the result of my being there unprotected. However, only one condition was addressed, and the question asked for challenges (plural) (Grade B)

Thoughtful/Intentional Response:

"If I had the opportunity to live in the core of the sun, I would face a number of substantial challenges: First and foremost of these would be to find some way to keep from getting instantly vaporized by the intense temperatures of millions of degrees present there."

"Additionally, the intense radiation in the core of the sun is lethal to all forms of life, especially me. Therefore I'd have to take some sort of radiation shield with me to make sure that I could survive the intense X-ray and ultraviolet radiation". Notice references to both the condition and what that condition would do to me...VOILA! (Grade A)

 

Examples of opinion/emotion writing:

Prompt: How would you feel if you were forced to move to the center of the sun?

 Weak Response:

"I wouldn't like it." Notice lack of IQIA response so the response seems rather detached. (Grade: C-/D)

 Good Enough Response:

"If I had to move to the core of the sun I wouldn't like it." Notice use of IQIA so the response is set up very nicely, but there isn't much thought put into the response. You say you wouldn't like it, but you don't say why. (Grade C)

Thoughtful Response:

"If I had to move to the center of the sun I'd be very upset. I'm guessing that there would be some way to survive there, but beyond that, there wouldn't be any of the environment that I love the most such as plants and water and mountains. I might be able to survive in the center of the sun but being without all the things that bring me joy would make me very unhappy." Notice strong use of IQIA to set up the response but also the strong connection to the absense of what makes me happy. That helps to build a convincing argument that I'd be pretty upset living there (Grade A)